Rory Carlisle

Prologue The broken sword lies like a pile of glittering silver stones on the floor of my father’s weaponry hall. I cannot help but wonder what will happen when he ...

I was really inrtigued by the first sentence, which is a great thing. It drew me in. =) I also like how you kept the family in the first paragraph ...

First of all, I really love the way this story writes. It's scattered, rambling, and choppy at times, but that's what makes it so interesting. That way works for this ...